Feedback on press release

I received Ms McKinney's (our English teacher) feedback on the press release I wrote about two weeks ago. You can find this text three posts down on this blog. The feedback was very positive; according to Ms McKinney the text was well constructed, especially the last paragraph containing the 'boilerplate'. There were some minor issues, though.

Lessons from a presentation

Today, Sören [http://learn-academic-english.blogspot.com/] and I held a presentation on a major cost-cutting package to help a car manufacturing company to improve their results. We were the financial consultants of Tompkins and Kosters and we had to devise a plan to rejuvenate their company. To come up with a decent plan, we held a meeting beforehand. In this meeting, we discussed the options we had to cut costs within the company and how they could increase their sales. I learned some very valuable lessons from this presentation, and especially from the feedback we got on it.

1. Don't use the phrase "Second of all, ...". "First of all, ..." exists, but after using this phrase, you have to use "Secondly", "Thirdly", et cetera. I made that mistake along with some of my classmates;
2. Be specific about your plans;
3. Prepare yourself for specific questions on your plans and how you want to execute them;
4. Make sure that the graphs you use in your presentation have a clear legend and that measurements are clearly specified; 
5. Be careful with using capitals in your presentation.

It is very important that I keep these lessons in mind. I will do the graded pair presentations in week 51 with Marijn and it will be about Erstaunliche Autos again. We can improve the rejuvenation package for this presentation and I can keep all this feedback in mind to ensure that I receive a high grade for it. 

You can find the presentation below: 

Presentation EA (Version 2.0)

Language Learning History

Today, one of my classmates attended me to the fact that I had not submitted my Language Learning History on my blog yet. I had a look and I found out that I had completely forgotten to add this important feature to this blog!

The Language Learning History, or LLH, is a summary about how you came in contact with the English language. It focuses on your first experiences with English, how your language skills improved over the years and what you want to achieve in the years coming.

I hope you will enjoy reading it and if you have any comments, you know where the button is. :)